The Legendary Figure Skater, Yuna Kim
In South Korea, it is hard to find who doesn't know Yuna Kim. Rather, people who don't know her are treated as odd. She's not only famous nationwide, but also worldwide to people who are interested in figure skating. Yuna Kim is a Korean figure skater who is creating a legend in a history of figure skating.
Yuna was born in September 5th, 1990 in the city of Bucheon in South Korea. She lived in Bucheon until her age of six and moved to the city of Gunpo. She started to skate when she was seven. She visited an ice-rink of Gwacheon, and got interested in figure skating. Then, she was strongly suggested to seriously continue to skate by coach Ryu Jonghyeon. He persuaded that Yuna could be a world-class skater when she grow up. In later years, she interviwed and said, "My coaches have told me my muscles and body structure are perfect for skating. I was born with a good instrument, maybe more so than the talent. I was lucky my coaches noticed early on and helped me develop that. A lot of people don't know they are born that way."
However, practicing a skating in Korea itself was an obstacle for her. In Korea, there weren't any qualified ice-rinks for practicing figure skating. In fact, the number of the rinks was not enough. Due to the public open of the rinks, she only had early morning or late night to practice, and she even had to move rink to rink to practice.
Having these difficulties, she keeps practices and practices and makes her junior debut. In her junior seasons, which were 2004 to 2006, she mastered five kinds of jumps. Also, she won medals in every competition, which is a big record that only two skaters own, including Yuna, in Ladies Single Figure Skating history. She also renewed Korean record with her scores.
In 2006-2007 seasons, she finally makes her senior debut. In this season, she meets Brian Orser as her new coach, who will achieve her biggest honor in her career together. At the same time, she moves to Toronto, Canada for more stable and systematic practice. Since then, she renews the world record and wins numerous competitions for few years. Her skating starts to get spotlight worldwide. Numerous fans and experts gave so much praise toward her perfect skating. However, in 2008, she faced injury occurred due to overwhelming practice continued for several years. Nevertheless, she kept skated with painkillers, which impressed many people.
Her career stands on the top at 2010 Vancouver Olympics. Before the Olympic, she was the favorite winner of Ladies' Single Figure Skating. In the Olympic, she wins the gold medal setting the world record, earning total of 228.56, in both short and free programs. She showed perfect, clean programs, which wrote legend in figure skating history and impressed the whole world. There are still many people who remember her performance of 2010 Olympics. She earned the name "Queen Yuna", due to the perfectness of her skating that no one can follow.
After Olympics, she concerns about her career as a skater. She thought about retirement, but she decides to challenge 2014 Olympic again. Also, she played a key role as a Korean committee members to host 2018 Pyeongchang Olympic. She delivered presentation for Pyeongchang in front of IOC committee, and Pyeongchang won the Olympic over other rival cities. Her career is still continuing, and we are all happy to see her wonderful skating.
1. Write one sentence to sum up what this person is like.
ReplyDeleteYuna Kim enjoys challenging things and has patience and perseverance.
-I totally agree with your opinion that Yuna Kim is one of the most marvelous people in the world. But I think your essay is not the type of descriptive essay. You put too much concentration on the acheivement of the person. For descriptive essay, you describe what the person looks like. So I think in the first paragraph, if you put some explanations about Yuna Kim, your essay is must better and is much closer to the descriptive essay. Thank you!
To An yumi, From Choe Kyung-Yo
ReplyDelete1. Write one sentence to sum up what this person is like
Mrs. Park was the most beautiful woman as well as the most energetic and passionate teacher I've ever met and will be throughout my life.
2. List three details from the essay that support your sentence in step 1.
(1) She was slim and hall, and had dark brown long hair, big brown eyes and great smile. She looked like Jessica Alba.
(2) She always prepared a lot to help her students understand math more easily.
(3) Even thought she was busy doing her job-teaching, she broke up her time in order to learn Art therapy that was totally different from teaching.
3. First, the writer used What the person looks like.
=> She was slim and tall. Her long hair was dark brown and softly curled. She had big brown eyes and great smile. Although she was a completely native Korean, she resembled Jessica Alba a lot, which made her a quite local celebrity around my neighborhood.
Second, the writer used What the person does.
=> She always prepared a lot before each class and did her best to make hard concepts easier to understand. / At that time, she was learning about Art therapy which was clearly far away from her profession.
4. Were there any things in this essay that you did not understand? If so, what were they?
Everything is very clear.
5. Why do you think the writer chose to describe this particular person?
Because Mrs. Park impressed her more than any other people she has ever met. Not only was she very beautiful, but she also gave the writer a valuable teaching that “doing what we want is not a reasonable excuse for neglecting what we have to do.”
6. Write one or two questions about the person described in this essay that you would like the writer to answer in the next draft.
According to your essay, Mrs. Park looked like she was very satisfied with her job, a math teacher.
In your essay, however, it seemed like she was trying to become an Art therapist. Is she trying to change her job or just to have two jobs? Plus, I also wonder why she chose an Art therapist, because it looks like having nothing to do with her major, math. Is there any particular reason that made her choose it?
To Jieun Choi, From Choe Kyung-Yo
1. Write one sentence to sum up what this person is like
=> Yuna Kim is a Korean figure skater who is creating a legend in a history of figure skating.
2. List three details from the essay that support your sentence in step 1.
(1) Having these difficulties, she keeps practices and practices and makes her junior debut.
(2) she wins the gold medal setting the world record, earning total of 228.56, in both short and free programs
(3) she played a key role as a Korean committee members to host 2018 Pyeongchang Olympic
3. First, the writer used What the person does.
=> (Kim did a lot of great things, it was very hard to pick up just one thing!) She won the gold medal setting the world record, earning total of 228.56, in both short and free programs at 2010 Vancouver Olympics.
Second, the writer used What other people say about the person.
=>She earned the name "Queen Yuna", due to the perfectness of her skating that no one can follow. (I also love this nickname very much)
4. Were there any things in this essay that you did not understand? If so, what were they?
Everything is very clear.
5. Why do you think the writer chose to describe this particular person?
Kim must have given an impression to her in many aspects, and Kim is the most famous and beloved person in Korea.
6. Write one or two questions about the person described in this essay that you would like the writer to answer in the next draft.
I like your essay a lot because I am also one of her fans. Anyway, you mainly wrote about her official records chronologically. If you added more descriptions about her not about her records, it would be better.
Sorry! I made a big mistake! I am very ashamed. Please just look at the comment for you. Ignore the yumi part.
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