tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5312347225760579712.post9181783625816118468..comments2014-05-27T04:45:59.446-07:00Comments on Intermediate Writing (2) fall 2013 3-4: An Yumi/Text book 11p questions/Tue3,4profjbhhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06809066317885065503noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5312347225760579712.post-68949868886805330242013-09-16T11:43:11.887-07:002013-09-16T11:43:11.887-07:00First, you were really honest through your writing...First, you were really honest through your writing, which I like very much.<br />Second, I empathized with you and your writing. I guess the reason is because we two have many things in common, such as learning English in the Korean way, studying English for the final goal, 수능. One difference, however, is I didn’t have no chance to speak and write in English before entering HUFS and you had when you were in high school.<br /><br />Actually, I was a little embarrassed at first, because I could not see any ‘bold-font’ questions and answers in your writing. I thought you totally misunderstood the assignment. But I was wrong. You were right, and you even proved that we don’t need to follow the standard form.<br />No questions and no answers form made your writing look more a piece of complete essay that has 5 paragraphs rather than just an assignment.<br />최경요(Choe Kyung-Yo)noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5312347225760579712.post-22605774333005838452013-09-16T00:18:51.672-07:002013-09-16T00:18:51.672-07:00201001450 Park, Hyun-ju.
Hi, I am surprised that ...201001450 Park, Hyun-ju.<br /><br />Hi, I am surprised that how many students who have experience of writing in foreign langauge- in this case, English- are in one mind. I've felt exactly the same thing as you explained above when I first started writing something in English,though, in my case, I started far later than you.The comparison in third and fourth paragraph about how the writing in English compared to dancing without mirror is the very part I enjoyed most. I can tell that , at lesat for me,it spiced up your writing a lot. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5312347225760579712.post-40674836952745890662013-09-14T23:31:07.597-07:002013-09-14T23:31:07.597-07:00To An Yumi From Kang Dabida
What I like about...To An Yumi From Kang Dabida <br />What I like about your writing is that you mixed three questions all together and melted them down as one easy, unlike other students including me. I think your writing is clear to understand and well-structured. And I liked such expressions as ‘the sentences looked like as if they were pasted from the outcome text box in the google translation program.’ This had me picture what you were trying to say. I also liked that you came up with the idea to express what it is like to write in English by using a simile, which obvious is the mirror. This made your writing more interesting and fun to continue reading. <br /><br />I think you are such a good writer. But it might help you improve your writing if you tell stories more straight to the point, for example using fewer conjunctions (which is I am also working on). This will help the readers to focus on what we’re trying to say. We can really speak less and say more by giving one powerful sentence instead of repeating over. Good job anyway! <br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com