tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5312347225760579712.post3828825337193661735..comments2014-05-27T04:45:59.446-07:00Comments on Intermediate Writing (2) fall 2013 3-4: Yoo Hongsang/2nd draft oral history/ Tue 11 a.m.profjbhhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06809066317885065503noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5312347225760579712.post-19460980663915793602013-11-18T17:11:34.384-08:002013-11-18T17:11:34.384-08:00LoYunSeo(노윤서)
Your essay is very interesting. And ...LoYunSeo(노윤서)<br />Your essay is very interesting. And I totally understand your thinking of how it is difficult to get job these days. So I was very surprised by your wonderful friend.<br />1 I want to know how you meet your friend.<br />2. In the sentence 'This is amazing because many other friends of mine----i think you don't need to put 'of mine' in this part.<br />3. IN your essay you write 'i asked him--'' too much. SO I recommend you change some these sentences to other expressions. <br />4.I want to know more about your interview related to the atmosphere of the interview and how he has made lots of efforts in getting job <br />thank you.<br />1.fAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com