tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5312347225760579712.post3388845904370658129..comments2014-05-27T04:45:59.446-07:00Comments on Intermediate Writing (2) fall 2013 3-4: Ha Eun Park/ 201001433/ Tue Wk 5 First Draftprofjbhhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06809066317885065503noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5312347225760579712.post-38061243399701488392013-10-07T17:11:34.920-07:002013-10-07T17:11:34.920-07:00From Saewhan to Ha Eun Park
1. Write one sentence...From Saewhan to Ha Eun Park<br /><br />1. Write one sentence to sum up what this person like?<br /><br />Her sister has a funny characteristic. <br /><br />2. List three details from the essay that support your sentence in step 1.<br /><br />"Every time I see her eat, I am surprise by the fact how much she can eat."<br />"whenever she is in a good mood she tries to snuggle with me."<br />"she looks and me and asks me to hug her."<br /><br /><br />3. <br />a) What the person looks like<br />"cute"<br />b) What the person says<br />"asks me to hug her."<br />c) What the person does<br />to "snuggle"<br />d) What other people say about the person<br />none<br /><br />4. Were there any things in this essay that you did not understand? If so, what were they?<br />None<br /><br />5. Why do you think the writer chose to describe this particular person?<br /><br />The writer didn't use a lot of describtive words and expressions. <br /><br />6. Write one or two questions about the person described in this essay that you would like the writer to answer in the next draft.<br />How does she look like? Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08186452687035008675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5312347225760579712.post-49270603358376733192013-10-06T00:31:38.234-07:002013-10-06T00:31:38.234-07:00Oh, sorry about the wrong name. I am just Yoo Hong...Oh, sorry about the wrong name. I am just Yoo Hongsang.<br />Sorry to Rho ryun, too. Actually I copied the format, so it was completely a mistake. Again, I apologize for the mistake. But, the contents of the answer are of course different.Yoo Hongsangnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5312347225760579712.post-56197172910270180072013-10-06T00:27:53.454-07:002013-10-06T00:27:53.454-07:00201001081/Rho ryun/ peer comment
1. What do you l...201001081/Rho ryun/ peer comment<br /><br />1. What do you like about this essay?<br /><br />This essay tells about sister. Family member is the best one to describe because we know them very much. Also it has a good development in that it started with the episode that shows her kind of funny characteristics but ends up with a precious being.<br /><br />2. What one word would you choose to describe the character? What specific information in the draft caused you to choose this word?<br /><br />I will choose 'glutton'. Sorry to choose this word, but the first half of this essay focused on how much she eats, and that was quite impressive.<br /><br /><br />3. List any places where you do not understand the writer’s meaning.<br /><br />Overall, I think it had a nice development and good word choice. <br /><br />4. What do you notice about the organization of the essay? For example, is the number of paragraphs appropriate? How could the writer improve the organization of the essay?<br /><br />This essay is a 5 paragraph long, so the number of the paragraphs is perfect to deveop the story with the simple and clear conclusion. It could be better if the short episode or the real dialoge was included.<br /><br />5. What would you like to know more about?<br /><br />As said above, I want to know about some episodes or dialogues to show her characteristics.<br /><br />6. Who do you think would be interested in reading this essay?<br /><br />I think the person who hasn't seen their family for a long time would be interested in this essay.Yoo Hongsangnoreply@blogger.com